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Clever and interesting, well laid out. I only have one niggle - the 'steel and ice' and 'blades and blood' images, whilst I realise you are trying to portray horror, don't really work for me, they feel a little weaker than the rest of the poem - maybe use something that suggests horror in a more subtle way?
Other than that it's a really good poem, thank you!