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Brilliant LIES
Fall from my lips.
Dazzling words of misdirection,
All on display to HIDE
The fact that there are pieces
MISSING.
That there is a darkness within
That DEVOURS.
Of course I can Love.
Of course I can be yours.
Most certainly I will never hurt you.
LIES!
She is screaming,
Locked away behind the mask,
Behind the Steel and Ice
And Blades and Blood.
Don't listen to her cries,
Look at the beautifully sculpted
WORDS
I have on display.
Aren't they much more
PLEASANT?
Aren't they what you
WANT
To hear?
I bow,
And gift you with
What you DESIRE.
LIES.

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In an odd mood. Not sure where this came from, but it was fun to write!:D

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*malphasloveshisfries Nov 9, 2012  Student Writer
*o* SO GOOD OMG
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*MabusTheDark Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Excellent!
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:iconchildofthebeat:
Nice :)

Clever and interesting, well laid out. I only have one niggle - the 'steel and ice' and 'blades and blood' images, whilst I realise you are trying to portray horror, don't really work for me, they feel a little weaker than the rest of the poem - maybe use something that suggests horror in a more subtle way?

Other than that it's a really good poem, thank you! :D
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